Hello,
What an impressive piece of writing. You have used very descriptive vocabulary, which helps the reader to create a clear picture in their mind. For example, sprinting, gathering and daring. However, you should have written friends instead of friend.
From Mr Short
This is a excellent piece of work from someone in Degas class! I hope Mrs Farag is pleased.
By:Joyce
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Hello,
What an impressive piece of writing. You have used very descriptive vocabulary, which helps the reader to create a clear picture in their mind. For example, sprinting, gathering and daring. However, you should have written friends instead of friend.
From Mr Short
This is a excellent piece of work from someone in Degas class! I hope Mrs Farag is pleased.
By:Joyce