I’m so pleased with this Mohamed- you’ve used figurative language very well; exactly the sort of thing I was looking for.
I also like the way you’ve used celebrity endorsement as a persuasive device. A good variety of punctuations used too- all features of level 5 writing. Keep up the good work!!
Hey Mo.M! I really loved reading this, I knew Ms Panayi would say “A good variety of punctuations used too- all features of level 5 writing.” You’re already a level 5 and I know you can get a level 6. By the way, I was looking at the chocolate cake all the way through… It’s just too lovely to not look at.
Also Mohamed.M, I love the swimming pool, the cuisine and the building.
I know you can get a level 6 easily in Maths and Reading. You always get higher than 35 in your Maths and sometimes spellings. NO OFFENCE!
I’m so pleased with this Mohamed- you’ve used figurative language very well; exactly the sort of thing I was looking for.
I also like the way you’ve used celebrity endorsement as a persuasive device. A good variety of punctuations used too- all features of level 5 writing. Keep up the good work!!
Yeah keep it up
Hey Mo.M! I really loved reading this, I knew Ms Panayi would say “A good variety of punctuations used too- all features of level 5 writing.” You’re already a level 5 and I know you can get a level 6. By the way, I was looking at the chocolate cake all the way through… It’s just too lovely to not look at.
Also Mohamed.M, I love the swimming pool, the cuisine and the building.
I know you can get a level 6 easily in Maths and Reading. You always get higher than 35 in your Maths and sometimes spellings. NO OFFENCE!
Hope you do well
Sevkan