Hi,
I like how you have started your blog deshawn but you could have written more.
You could you use horrible instead of scary.
I really like the picture you have posted.
sadia
Hello Deshawn,
I think you need to use more commas in your horror story to make it stand out. Other from that, This is a very good 50-word horror story. 🙂
hi Deshawn,
You could of used dreamt instead of dream because it wont make sense . You had a spelling mistake and that was hde
I think what you meant was HE’D ,other than that was perfect.
Hi,
I like how you have started your blog deshawn but you could have written more.
You could you use horrible instead of scary.
I really like the picture you have posted.
sadia
Hi,
I am surprised that you have used exactly 50 words.
Well Done
By:Joyce
Hello Deshawn,
I think you need to use more commas in your horror story to make it stand out. Other from that, This is a very good 50-word horror story. 🙂
By Premice
Hi Deshawn I like 50 word horrer story but you did not put your fullstop.
by Michael
hi Deshawn,
You could of used dreamt instead of dream because it wont make sense . You had a spelling mistake and that was hde
I think what you meant was HE’D ,other than that was perfect.
From : Tigris