I like your blog post because I liked the way you shouted “It was spooking me out!” and I also liked your alien with the boxers but on the other hand, you should try to describe the tree, for example ‘The tree was red as blood with an monster on top.’
So far I’m impressed.
Hi
I really liked your story, but there could have been a few improvements.
For example;
Instead of: “Later I saw a shadow, It looks like a huge monster coming to eat me….”
You could have written: “All of a sudden I saw a shadow. I couldn’t really work out what it was or even it was a human. It looked like an obese, hairy monster. As I walked, it followed me…I don’t know what to do!”
Hello Adam I like your blogs and your picture.
From Michael
Hi Adam,
I liked what you did with your blog post.You added a picture of what you had in mind.Very smart!
By:Joyce
Hello Adam,
This is a good 50-word horror story. Very good work!
By Premice
Hello Adam,
I like your blog post because I liked the way you shouted “It was spooking me out!” and I also liked your alien with the boxers but on the other hand, you should try to describe the tree, for example ‘The tree was red as blood with an monster on top.’
So far I’m impressed.
From Renas
Hello Adam
I like your horror story but you could of do something else instead of he’s going to eat me.
By:Redwan
Hi
I really liked your story, but there could have been a few improvements.
For example;
Instead of: “Later I saw a shadow, It looks like a huge monster coming to eat me….”
You could have written: “All of a sudden I saw a shadow. I couldn’t really work out what it was or even it was a human. It looked like an obese, hairy monster. As I walked, it followed me…I don’t know what to do!”
Ela