Hey Premice!
I realy liked how you used the ellipses when you were talking about the class prize. And yes, we did win! Maybe, just to make it a little bit more better, you could try and write about what we actually learnt about.
Senem
I love the funky design. Excellent use of structure and colour to engage the reader. Also, well done for using the word ecstatic instead of happy. Still, there are one or two things I want you to watch out for when you next write a blog post:
INTO University is a place that you learn… = INTO University is a place where you learn (place = where)
I would like to be a choreographer so that I can teach… = I would like to be a choreographer, so that I can teach…
We put a comma before so, as this ensures your writing is level 4.
Hi Aaliyah,
The prize they gave us was a book about science and they gave us a something else but I don’t know what it is.
Maybe Mr Short will show us.
The prize was a Science book called “Everything you need to know about Science” and I think the next prize was a Horrible Histories card/quiz game thing.
Yeah, you did miss out on the fun! hahahah lol 🙂 😛 🙂 😛 🙂 😛
PS: PLEASE COMMENT ON MY BLOG POST ON teachers, EVEN TOUGH YOUR NOT IN THIS SCHOOL, YOU COULD STILL WRITE WHICH TEACHER YOU’D LIKE TO TEACH MONET CLASS THIS YEAR.
Hi Premice,
I agree with you. We did have a great time. Instead of fun you should have put we had a wonderful time.
From Tigris
Hey Premice!
I realy liked how you used the ellipses when you were talking about the class prize. And yes, we did win! Maybe, just to make it a little bit more better, you could try and write about what we actually learnt about.
Senem
Hello Premice,
I love the funky design. Excellent use of structure and colour to engage the reader. Also, well done for using the word ecstatic instead of happy. Still, there are one or two things I want you to watch out for when you next write a blog post:
INTO University is a place that you learn… = INTO University is a place where you learn (place = where)
I would like to be a choreographer so that I can teach… = I would like to be a choreographer, so that I can teach…
We put a comma before so, as this ensures your writing is level 4.
Mr Short
Hello Premice
I liked your blog about INTO UNIVERSITY
but next time use the power of 3
By Alkan
Hi Premice ,
I like your INTO University post, as I like the style you gave it. You even found their logo!
By Hannaa Ijouiher :):):):):)
Ooooooh a prize…
what was it?
I missed out on all that fun but I`m happy you all had fun.
Aaliyah
Hi Aaliyah,
The prize they gave us was a book about science and they gave us a something else but I don’t know what it is.
Maybe Mr Short will show us.
By Premice 🙂
Hello Aaliyah,
The prize was a Science book called “Everything you need to know about Science” and I think the next prize was a Horrible Histories card/quiz game thing.
Yeah, you did miss out on the fun! hahahah lol 🙂 😛 🙂 😛 🙂 😛
PS: PLEASE COMMENT ON MY BLOG POST ON teachers, EVEN TOUGH YOUR NOT IN THIS SCHOOL, YOU COULD STILL WRITE WHICH TEACHER YOU’D LIKE TO TEACH MONET CLASS THIS YEAR.
From: Ela 🙂 😛 🙂 😛 🙂 😛