The use of rhyme helped your poem to flow nicely. I particularly like the “I mean 14! I don’t think he was keen” line. However, you’ve made a few errors, since you did not check your post before publishing it!
You wrote – even though he’s been chased of his country – when you should have written – even though he was chased from his country.
Please make an effort to check your post before publishing it.
Hello
I really like your post, specially the part when you said He makes us look like barbie dolls,
He’s 6 foot 9 ,
Think its because of his spine,
Any way he thought about what he wanted to be,
He made his dream a reality.
By:Redwan
Hello Faith, I really like your rap it`s really full of information about” Luol Deng”
I will look up more about him he seems to be a famous basket ball player that everyone likes…
I really like your work keep it up!
Hello Faith,
The use of rhyme helped your poem to flow nicely. I particularly like the “I mean 14! I don’t think he was keen” line. However, you’ve made a few errors, since you did not check your post before publishing it!
You wrote – even though he’s been chased of his country – when you should have written – even though he was chased from his country.
Please make an effort to check your post before publishing it.
Nevertheless, keep up the enthusiastic blogging!
Mr Short
Hello
I really like your post, specially the part when you said He makes us look like barbie dolls,
He’s 6 foot 9 ,
Think its because of his spine,
Any way he thought about what he wanted to be,
He made his dream a reality.
By:Redwan
Hello Faith,
This rap is off the hook!
Spot on.
By Premice 🙂
Hello,
Your post is good Faith because i like when you said Loul Deng is 6 foot 9 and i lke when you described hem.
By Aysegul Gurelden
Hello Faith, I really like your rap it`s really full of information about” Luol Deng”
I will look up more about him he seems to be a famous basket ball player that everyone likes…
I really like your work keep it up!
From:Aaliyah:your best friend for life
😉 🙂